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mja,

Thanks for that Rutles link.  I’ll take a look soon.

vonbontee said
Funny Paper, I know you didn’t ask me; but might I suggest “drop kicks”, “hot licks” or “cop flicks”?

All good rhymes, however, the rhythm of the line at the juncture in my song would make any one of those sound awkward, since the two syllables will be sung very fast together. 

I’m not good at writing music, but if you know as much or more than I do — imagine a fast tempo song in 4/8, where there is a four-syllable lyric at one point, with all four syllables as fast as four 8th notes in a row, beginning at 3 and ending at 2 of the following measure: “3-4-1-2” (with the last syllable — say “kicks” — held for several beats).

I guess I’d like a 4-syllable word where the last two syllables can rhyme with “chopsticks” and where the 2nd syllable flows smoothly into the 3rd.  Or it could be a one-syllable word followed by a 3-syllable word.

Just thought of some: tropics, electronics, harmonics, comics, topics, onyx. They have the “o” sound and end in “-ix,” but I don’t know if any will work…

Egroeg Evoli said
 it might be easier if you could tell me what the lyric is.

The way I write songs, I come up with the melody and rhythm of the notes first, then fill in the words later.  I know it sounds weird to do it this way, and sometimes it’s conducive to writing whimsical or nearly nonsensical songs; but I’ve often come up with meaningful lyrics this way.  I guess it’s analogous to the “meter” some poets limit themselves to.

If you meant you’d like to see the “chopsticks” line, this is it:

It was the sweet & sour duck,

from take-out, from the same box,

sharing the same pair of chopsticks…

My fortune said I was in luck,

not in love,

_____________________ (this is where I’m stuck — note: I don’t really need a rhyme for “box”, the way the melody goes; and again, the line needs to be only four syllables, as opposed to the many syllables of the first stanza)

Funny Paper said

Egroeg Evoli said
 it might be easier if you could tell me what the lyric is.

The way I write songs, I come up with the melody and rhythm of the notes first, then fill in the words later.  I know it sounds weird to do it this way, and sometimes it’s conducive to writing whimsical or nearly nonsensical songs; but I’ve often come up with meaningful lyrics this way.  I guess it’s analogous to the “meter” some poets limit themselves to.

That sounds like as good a method as any.

If Linde could combine both jobs, she could eat ice cream and watch movies — and get paid!